tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post6877250718341554553..comments2024-01-26T13:36:51.551-08:00Comments on Writing and Living by Richard P. Hughes: First Campaigner Challenge.writing and living by Richard P Hugheshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03814139767151989286noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-26267177359864685682011-09-18T08:56:27.071-07:002011-09-18T08:56:27.071-07:00I definitely want to keep reading!I definitely want to keep reading!Deb Shuckahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03439395710731341021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-48564381240608894632011-09-15T06:42:11.550-07:002011-09-15T06:42:11.550-07:00Oh writing in first person female POV, eh??? I lik...Oh writing in first person female POV, eh??? I like it! I'm glad you're challenging yourself! Lots of desire in this snippet. Very nice!PK HREZOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11650153097981426833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-81648443917425419782011-09-13T09:04:30.327-07:002011-09-13T09:04:30.327-07:00Very suspensful and eerie!
Fellow group 18 Campa...Very suspensful and eerie! <br /><br />Fellow group 18 Campaigner, <br /><br />C.M. CiprianiCrystalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06387604778357366261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-10925588256335821662011-09-12T10:16:06.275-07:002011-09-12T10:16:06.275-07:00Interesting stuff. It could lead in a lot of direc...Interesting stuff. It could lead in a lot of directions. <br /><br />Good pacing, tight writing. I like it.Scott Buryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05061034006121401082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-13045618601547715192011-09-10T15:37:53.648-07:002011-09-10T15:37:53.648-07:00Dear Richard, my name is Elizabeth Moss and I'...Dear Richard, my name is Elizabeth Moss and I'm one of the judges for the campaign challenge. I'm delighted to say your story really struck me and you'll be going through to Stage Two of the contest. <br /><br />Congratulations!<br /><br />What I liked about your story was the way you built the suspense by employing most of the senses: the sound of the dragging steps, then touch - 'I felt around in the darkness' - then that striking image of the 'shining yellow eyes', and a gravelly voice which strikes us as sinister. All that's missing is taste. (But maybe that comes AFTER the door closes.)<br /><br />I also enjoyed the cheeky way you leave the story unresolved, with us not knowing WHO this is - is it Jack? has Jack been transformed in some way? is he good or evil? - or exactly what he intends to do with the narrator. <br /><br />Not sure breasts can stiffen though. Lol.<br /><br />Best of luck in the next round!Elizabeth Mosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11177542810095868110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-38670030760518273132011-09-10T10:28:27.574-07:002011-09-10T10:28:27.574-07:00I like the way you described the yellow eyes; eeri...I like the way you described the yellow eyes; eerie, but irresistible at the same time. Great entry!Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-69076724547276534422011-09-10T04:48:38.079-07:002011-09-10T04:48:38.079-07:00Love it. Makes me want to read more.Love it. Makes me want to read more.Maeve Frazierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00788413883600771145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-9583308219739249292011-09-09T10:28:43.071-07:002011-09-09T10:28:43.071-07:00What the...?
Whose or what's yellow eyes are ...<i>What the...?</i><br /><br />Whose or what's yellow eyes are those? Open that door back up and show us what happens next.<br />You did well in maintaining the suspense.<br /><br /><br />Lee<br /><a href="http://tossingitout.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Tossing It Out</a>Arlee Birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11663942782929929334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-81637327748392188242011-09-08T20:11:15.333-07:002011-09-08T20:11:15.333-07:00Wow yellow warm eyes...Scary good!!
http://www.do...Wow yellow warm eyes...Scary good!!<br /><br />http://www.doreenmcgettigan.comDoreen McGettiganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11691803968607905576noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-547035747697943592011-09-08T19:39:57.050-07:002011-09-08T19:39:57.050-07:00Scary good. Like the yellow eye thing going on. W...Scary good. Like the yellow eye thing going on. What was it? Certainly not human.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10474427967799515034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-16113704140934811862011-09-08T18:33:08.156-07:002011-09-08T18:33:08.156-07:00Very interesting. Great suspense and chill factor....Very interesting. Great suspense and chill factor. I like the yellow eyes too.Christine Rainshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08263694662585963900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-83588168443243590172011-09-08T17:21:58.381-07:002011-09-08T17:21:58.381-07:00Sounds like someone isn't long for this world ...Sounds like someone isn't long for this world ;) Great work!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06040374669996990205noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-34275079461819636712011-09-07T22:10:40.663-07:002011-09-07T22:10:40.663-07:00Uh, I think your MC made the wrong decision for a ...Uh, I think your MC made the wrong decision for a long life, but the right one for an interesting, riveting read! LOL. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-57500693234528319452011-09-07T17:45:43.092-07:002011-09-07T17:45:43.092-07:00Alluring yellow eyes...that sounded cool. Who is t...Alluring yellow eyes...that sounded cool. Who is the owner of those eyes?<br /><br />If you'd like to make this into a longer story, or write something on similar lines, check out <a href="http://amloki.blogspot.com/p/sign-up-for-rule-of-three-blogfest.html" rel="nofollow"> The Rule of Three Blogfest</a> ---a month-long extravaganza in the fictional town of Renaissance this October, with some great Amazon vouchers, author appearances as prizes, and of course loads of comment love and exposure for your writing.<br /><br />You're a short story writer, and we need short stories at Renaissance!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04283371140346602856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-22679038898362365822011-09-07T13:05:49.398-07:002011-09-07T13:05:49.398-07:00Wow! This is good. Creepy. Suspenseful. Ooh, the p...Wow! This is good. Creepy. Suspenseful. Ooh, the possibilities...<br /><a href="http://anncarbinebest.com/" rel="nofollow"><i>Ann Best, Author of In the Mirror, A Memoir of Shattered Secrets</i></a>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-48039725831473107752011-09-06T23:46:09.504-07:002011-09-06T23:46:09.504-07:00Great suspense, plenty of good, creepy stuff. Love...Great suspense, plenty of good, creepy stuff. Loved it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-71136330637561062392011-09-06T17:42:56.967-07:002011-09-06T17:42:56.967-07:00Ugh! Now you have to write more!Ugh! Now you have to write more!Donna K. Weaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15763832177263927311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-6601351977585009902011-09-06T13:09:13.232-07:002011-09-06T13:09:13.232-07:00Awesome story! I loved how it ended in a way I did...Awesome story! I loved how it ended in a way I didn't expect. And congrats on making it exactly 200 words!Peggy Eddlemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10241451940725996650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-51209779416234607252011-09-06T11:38:19.995-07:002011-09-06T11:38:19.995-07:00Good job! Quite eery!
I don't think there ...Good job! Quite eery! <br /><br />I don't think there would be any circumstances where I'd find yellow eyes beautiful. Unless it was my cat. But I don;t have a cat any more. So it would just be eery!Nancy Thompsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05735642863696266005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-5679648588887457212011-09-06T04:26:31.825-07:002011-09-06T04:26:31.825-07:00Hi Richard, thanks for coming by my blog the oter ...Hi Richard, thanks for coming by my blog the oter day and the follow. I can't wait to find iut what the yellow eye belong to.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02530886181437955643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-76988055488328992552011-09-05T23:08:39.387-07:002011-09-05T23:08:39.387-07:00I immediately thought of Little Red Ridinghood and...I immediately thought of Little Red Ridinghood and the wolf :)1000th.monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-53811428385265752352011-09-05T20:16:15.805-07:002011-09-05T20:16:15.805-07:00Interesting! Yellow eyes are always a nice touch!Interesting! Yellow eyes are always a nice touch!Elana Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05877856005992028912noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-24499927751453932982011-09-05T19:49:27.635-07:002011-09-05T19:49:27.635-07:00Freaky.
My kinda freaky.Freaky.<br />My kinda freaky.Tanya Reimerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00293977395016853814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-686440638207791452011-09-05T17:52:43.056-07:002011-09-05T17:52:43.056-07:00Almost like enthrallment...gives me the shivers! ...Almost like enthrallment...gives me the shivers! These frightening tales are really quite good, but I'm afraid to keep reading. Ha! (I'll give myself nightmares:) Saying hello from our shared fiction group as well as reading your challenge entry ~ NadjaNadja Notarianihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01339595239944177531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2789848305671189900.post-90675281649542380942011-09-05T16:33:48.684-07:002011-09-05T16:33:48.684-07:00The yellow eyes thing was unexpected. Great job!The yellow eyes thing was unexpected. Great job!Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.com