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Wednesday, October 5, 2011

Rule of Three Contest

The Rule of Three contest has begun. You can check out the rules at http://jc-martin.com/fighterwriter/rule-of-3-blogfest/.

I took as my prompt 'someone might fall in love'.
It's about 500 words.
One of the things about Renaissance that wasn't mentioned in the rules, but was a part of the description of Renaissance, was that everyone there has secrets. So, I tried to work that in. Anyway, here's my first entry:

Welcome to Renaissance

            I found myself in the town of Renaissance, as if I had awoken into a dream, as if I had left the real world behind. I walked down Main Street, admiring the statues and frescos and listening to the troubadours singing love songs. This was better than Real World, where there was no happiness. All I had wanted in Real World was love, and all I had gotten were vampires attacking me like swarms of mosquitoes on a hot summer night. I hated it. So, here I am in Renaissance, which means “rebirth.” Have I been reborn? I hope so.
            The sign outside the town had said: Welcome to Renaissance, Population 333. How can a town know its exact population? Do they put up a new sign with a new number every time someone dies or is born? I guess, with only 333 people, there probably aren’t many births and deaths here in any one year, maybe not for years at a time.
My life is a mystery to me, one I’ve been trying to solve for a long time. My one big question is: why do vampires like me? What’s in my blood that attracts them, makes them want to feast on me? They never bothered me until I began my menstrual cycle. When my scent was released into the air every thirty days, the vultures would circle in the sky over my head. Is that why they call the female’s monthly flow of blood the woman’s curse? Whatever it’s called, it’s the real world, and everywhere you look in Real World, things are after you. Some things want you alive so they can suck out your essence, and some things want you dead so they can eat you whole. And the two things fight over you. And, if you’re weak, in their fight they will tear you apart. That’s just the way it is in Real World. I only hope it won’t be that way in Renaissance.
Everywhere I look here, the people are beautiful. The women wear the newest fashions. The men wear the smartest suits. I’m disturbed that I’m dressed in worn out blue jeans with holes in the knees, and a cowl neck sweater. In Real World, I was chic, but here, I’m a fright. But everyone looks at me, smiles, and says hello. Everyone seems friendly. I’ve got to get to know these people. The one thing I don’t want them to know, though, is that I’m afraid.
I came to a tavern and, being hungry and thirsty, decided to go inside. There were two men sitting at the counter, drinking beers and eating sandwiches. I was immediately struck by their handsomeness and their politeness—they both stood up and bowed to me when I came through the door. I was taken aback. They smiled and waited for me to sit down at the stool between them before sitting down themselves. My heart fluttered. Maybe I had been reborn.
(to be continued)


So, there it is. Where to go from here? I have a good idea, but rather than keep writing, I decided to wait for the next set of prompts, and hope they work for my story.

28 comments:

Misha said...

Nice! This is an intriguing start.

I'm also waiting for the prompts to see where the story will be going.

:-)

Clarissa Draper said...

I like your entry even though you leave us hanging. Can't wait to see the answers to your character's life questions.

Rick G said...

Very interesting start. Looking forward to part 2!

Elizabeth Varadan aka Mrs. Seraphina said...

What an intriguing beginning! Both for the "Real World" left behind, where things go badly (yeah, vampires every month, that can be pretty bad), and for the introduction to Renaissance where, frankly, everything seems TOO perfect. I can't help expecting that something is going to go wrong. Hopefully I'll find out more in part 2.

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Uh, oh. Could be she just might want to go back home in the near future. Great beginning, Roland

Reka Sang said...

Intriguing and looking for more answers as to what the word vampires really stand for.

Ann Best said...

Oh, HAS she been reborn? This is fraught with suspense. Well done. I'm anxious for more!
Ann Best, Author of In the Mirror, A Memoir of Shattered Secrets

Barbara V. Evers said...

I'm getting a Stepford Wives vibe here. It's gonna get interesting, that's for sure!

The Golden Eagle said...

I want to know what happens next! Great beginning. :)

kenradaniels said...

Very nice beginning! I'm anxious to find out what's up with everyone in Renaissance. As a Paranormal Romance writer, the vampires of the Real World are intriguing, but it's the perfection of the Renaissance's citizens that will bring me back next week. :-)

Corinne O'Flynn said...

Interesting! I wonder where we are all headed too. What fun this is. Will be back for more of your story. :)

J.C. Martin said...

This is a note to say that I’ve been by to read your entry. As one of the judges, I don’t want to make any specific comments that could betray my judgement — keeps you guys in suspense for longer! :) Suffice it to say that I’m truly enjoying all the different and creative takes on Renaissance and the Rule of 3!
J.C.

Bethany Elizabeth said...

I like the setup here - great job! :) I like how you're bringing the actual meaning of the word Renaissance into the story.

Kurt Hartwig said...

I really like that her blood is particularly... interesting to the nasties of the night. Renaissance can't be _that_ good to her, can it?

May-Day_Aura said...

I like the mystery. Good beginning.

Like you, I have an idea of where my story is going but I'm going to wait for the prompts before writing anymore of it. The prompts might take me in a new direction I haven't thought about. Good luck in your writing. =)

Ms Saba (aka Teacher007.5) said...

Interesting beginning. I look forward to reading more.

Sylvia van Bruggen said...

What a great start! Definitely looking forward to more!

Ciara said...

Nice job. I love the way you tied being reborn into it. I can't wait to read what is next.

kelworthfiles said...

Yes, that's an interesting start. I wish you good luck with the other prompts. Are there vampires in Renaissance? I've seen some in other people's part ones...

Thanks for coming to Renaissance with us.

BornStoryteller said...

Richard: I'm glad you picked up on the "everyone has a secret". I included it in all things i wrote about Renaissance and in both videos: and you are the ONLY one who took that as I meant it to be:

every character wants something..and in Renaissance, everyone has a secret.

Thanks
Stuart
Tale Spinning

Book Republik Blog said...

This is a strong entry, curious and bizarre with great imagery. Looking forward to part 2.

Peggy Eddleman said...

That was awesome and intriguing! Love it!

Matthew MacNish said...

Great entry! Thanks for sharing, Richard.

Jolene Perry said...

Cool :D

Sometimes prompts feel like challenges, and other times, they're just annoying.

Maeve Frazier said...

Very nice start. I love your entry and can't wait to read more. Good luck!

David Powers King said...

You have me glued. Love the setting and voice you've started here. Good thing part 2 is just around the corner! :)

Tanya Reimer said...

OMG this FANTASTIC! Great job, Richard!

Joshua said...

You had me at vampires.