Cane chose Ian Fleming as a master writer for a variety of reasons. The main reason I like Fleming is for his use of details. Besides creating suspense and excitement, Fleming uses "sumptuous details." To see for myself, I read Fleming's short story "Octopussy." (Don't you wish you could come up with titles like that? I wish I could.) Of course, it's a James Bond story--and Bond is one of my favorite characters from the movies, and maybe now from literature--but the story has little to do with James Bond. He's a minor character in the story.
Even though it's a short story, "Octopussy" is full of Fleming's attention to details. Some of his detailed descriptions are fairly long; e.g., he uses about 200 words to describe the deadly scorpion fish (a major player in the story). Fleming mentions that scorpion fish are the source of "the rascasse that is the foundation of bouillabaisse." When Smythe (the main character) eats some sausage in the mountains, Fleming writes "Oberhauser's (another character in the story) sausage was a real mountaineer's meal--tough, well-fatted and strongly garlicked."
Fleming's use of details isn't limited to food-related subjects. When Smythe looks at the case containing gold stolen from Germany during WWII, Fleming writes "There were the same markings on each--the swastika in a circle below an eagle, and the date, 1943--the mint marks of the Reichsbank."
When Smythe and Oberhauser reach their destination in the mountains, Fleming writes "Directly above them, perhaps a hundred feet up under the lee of the shoulder, were the weather-beaten boards of the hut." What struck me about the sentence was 'under the lee of the shoulder' and 'weather-beaten boards,' two wonderful details I would have not thought of.
The last description I'll mention that sturck me as something I would have missed is when, after Smythe shoots a man in the mountains, Fleming writes "The deep boom of the two shots that had been batting to and fro amoung the mountains died away." I thought the double-entrendre on 'died' was clever.
One thing Cane doesn't mention that I found interesting is Fleming's use of character names. Of course, we all know James Bond. But the names of the other characters in this story are interesting as well: Dexter Smythe, Hannes Oberhauser, and the Foo brothers.
What does it mean to me as a writer? It makes me want to try harder with details. It means more research and greater visualization of scenes and finding the words that make it the best description I can make it. And maybe a greater consideration of characters' names.
What do you think of these examples of description from "Octopussy"? Do they strike you as better than average? Also, do you find the characters' names more interesting than the usual?
Saturday, March 3, 2012
Thursday, March 1, 2012
I'm in a quandary.
Yes. I'm in a bit of a quandary. I've basically finished Only The Lonely and hope to publish it soon. The quandary is: what do I work on next. Maybe you can help me decide.
I've got perhaps 80-85% of a sequel to Only The Lonely already written called Battlefields of Love. My crude estimation is that I can finish it in 3-6 months, maybe even closer to 3 months. In some ways I think it's a better book than OTL. It will be about the same length, 75-80 thousand words.
I've got another novel that I wrote maybe 8-10 years ago that is probably 99% complete called The Sendoff. It has nothing to do with the OTL saga I have planned. I crudely estimate finishing it in 1-2 months. In some ways, I think it's the best book I've ever written, but it's from when I was first transistioning from literary writing to a more popular vein of writing. And it's somewhat, though not entirely, different from OTL. It's probably a bit shorter than 75,000 words, more like 50-60 thousand.
So, there's my quandary. Which do I work on next? Which one would you work on?
I've got perhaps 80-85% of a sequel to Only The Lonely already written called Battlefields of Love. My crude estimation is that I can finish it in 3-6 months, maybe even closer to 3 months. In some ways I think it's a better book than OTL. It will be about the same length, 75-80 thousand words.
I've got another novel that I wrote maybe 8-10 years ago that is probably 99% complete called The Sendoff. It has nothing to do with the OTL saga I have planned. I crudely estimate finishing it in 1-2 months. In some ways, I think it's the best book I've ever written, but it's from when I was first transistioning from literary writing to a more popular vein of writing. And it's somewhat, though not entirely, different from OTL. It's probably a bit shorter than 75,000 words, more like 50-60 thousand.
So, there's my quandary. Which do I work on next? Which one would you work on?
Wednesday, February 29, 2012
I've been tagged by Kamille Elahi
Hi, Everyone, I've been tagged by Kamille Elahi. She's a vivacious, wise-beyond-her-years, 19 year old college student in England. Check out her website.
Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to answer the 10 questions I created at the bottom of this post. Tag, and notify that you've tagged them, five people. Finally, create 10 questions you'd like them to answer.
Here are the questions I had to answer.
1) When was the first time you travelled away from home?
The first time I travelled away from home by myself was when I was nine years old. I flew from Jacksonville, Florida, to my grandparents home in North Carolina. Flying (prop plane) was quite an experience for me.
2) Did you ever dream of the ground eating you?
Never.
3) What's the best meal you can cook?
Ham, eggs, and grits.
4) Have you ever met an author?
yes, several
5) How cool was meeting that author?
no big deal
6) What is your secret ambition?
To go to heaven, if there is such a place.
7) Who is the scariest person you have stood up to?
A muscle-bound neighbor with whom I clashed.
8) Have you ever tasted sea water?
Sure. Lots of times.
9) What's your favourite song and why?
I don't have a favorite song, because songs come and go like crazy.
10) Blogging or Writing?
Writing.
I must now tag five people.
tanya reimer
terri talley venters
gabriel a lessa
jackson porter
sankofa-me-lately
These are your ten questions:
1. Where were you born?
2. Do you speak more than one language? Which other?
3. Do you play a musical instrument? Which one?
4. Which is your favorite city in the world? Why?
5. Who is your favorite author?
6. What was your favorite subject in school (high school, college, whatever)?
7. At what age did you first become aware of yourself as a person? How did it come about?
8. Would you like to travel in outerspace?
9. Do you believe in astrology?
10. What is your astrological sign?
Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to answer the 10 questions I created at the bottom of this post. Tag, and notify that you've tagged them, five people. Finally, create 10 questions you'd like them to answer.
Here are the questions I had to answer.
1) When was the first time you travelled away from home?
The first time I travelled away from home by myself was when I was nine years old. I flew from Jacksonville, Florida, to my grandparents home in North Carolina. Flying (prop plane) was quite an experience for me.
2) Did you ever dream of the ground eating you?
Never.
3) What's the best meal you can cook?
Ham, eggs, and grits.
4) Have you ever met an author?
yes, several
5) How cool was meeting that author?
no big deal
6) What is your secret ambition?
To go to heaven, if there is such a place.
7) Who is the scariest person you have stood up to?
A muscle-bound neighbor with whom I clashed.
8) Have you ever tasted sea water?
Sure. Lots of times.
9) What's your favourite song and why?
I don't have a favorite song, because songs come and go like crazy.
10) Blogging or Writing?
Writing.
I must now tag five people.
tanya reimer
terri talley venters
gabriel a lessa
jackson porter
sankofa-me-lately
These are your ten questions:
1. Where were you born?
2. Do you speak more than one language? Which other?
3. Do you play a musical instrument? Which one?
4. Which is your favorite city in the world? Why?
5. Who is your favorite author?
6. What was your favorite subject in school (high school, college, whatever)?
7. At what age did you first become aware of yourself as a person? How did it come about?
8. Would you like to travel in outerspace?
9. Do you believe in astrology?
10. What is your astrological sign?
Wednesday, February 22, 2012
John Locke and publishing
Today, at the supermarket, I saw one of John Locke's self-published ebooks now in paperback. I looked inside and saw that he owns the copyright, it was published by his own publishing company, and a statement that he'd sold over 1.5 million ebooks. He has set up some kind of marketing and distribution deal with one of the bigger publishers to publish his ebooks as paper books, apparently without giving up his rights.
This shows the kind of evolution the publishing industry is going through. People who self-publish ebooks certainly have a future in paper books as well. And the business models are changing. John Locke's deal is one model, maybe the best. Who knows at this point? But I think it shows that self-publishing ebooks is a viable option for many of us.
This shows the kind of evolution the publishing industry is going through. People who self-publish ebooks certainly have a future in paper books as well. And the business models are changing. John Locke's deal is one model, maybe the best. Who knows at this point? But I think it shows that self-publishing ebooks is a viable option for many of us.
Friday, February 17, 2012
Write Like the Masters, by William Cane (3) Honore de Balzac
The first master writer that Cane discusses is Honore de Balzac. Cane points out that Balzac is an expert in the use of emotional tags ("little references to the feelings of his characters"). However Balzac does not tag just any emotion; he tags the deeper emotions. To get a first-hand view of this, I read Balzac's Eugenie Grandet, paying especial attention to Balzac's use of tags. There were quite a few times that he used them, and he actually didn't seem to use tags for any other reason than for emotions. He didn't use them for descriptions of sunsets, or clothes, or much of anything else.
The first use of such a tag that I noticed was when Eugenie falls in love with her cousin (Charles), whom her father doesn't like, and she realizes her father disapproves of him.
The distant hopes in her heart bloomed suddenly, became real, tangible, like a cluster of flowers, and she saw them cut down and wilting on the earth.
Mr. Grandet is an extreme miser. This is how Balzac describes Mrs. Grandet's feelings after her husband tells her they will have their discussion in the morning concerning her spending too much money.
The poor woman went to sleep like a schoolboy who, not having learned his lessons, knows he will see his master's angry face on the morrow.
Mr. Grandet has given Eugenie a great many gold coins as a savings for her future, perhaps a dowry, but she has given the money to her cousin, Charles, whom she loves, to help him recover his reputation and settle his dead father's debts. When Mr. Grandet finds out, Balzac writes:
"You have not got your gold!" cried Grandet, starting up erect, like a horse that hears a cannon fired beside him.
There were others, but these are enough to get the idea. The tags are clever and reflect the emotions of the characters. They are very visual and contain the element Balzac is trying to convey: in the first one, Eugenie's new-found love dying just after it blooms; the second suggests the trepidation and fear of what will happen; and the last describes the shock Mr. Grandet feels.
This use of tags was very revealing to me, showing me a more powerful way of using tags than just describing everyday things. Perhaps this will be useful to you.
Do you already use tags this way? Do you think it would strengthen you writing if you used them in this fashion?
The first use of such a tag that I noticed was when Eugenie falls in love with her cousin (Charles), whom her father doesn't like, and she realizes her father disapproves of him.
The distant hopes in her heart bloomed suddenly, became real, tangible, like a cluster of flowers, and she saw them cut down and wilting on the earth.
Mr. Grandet is an extreme miser. This is how Balzac describes Mrs. Grandet's feelings after her husband tells her they will have their discussion in the morning concerning her spending too much money.
The poor woman went to sleep like a schoolboy who, not having learned his lessons, knows he will see his master's angry face on the morrow.
Mr. Grandet has given Eugenie a great many gold coins as a savings for her future, perhaps a dowry, but she has given the money to her cousin, Charles, whom she loves, to help him recover his reputation and settle his dead father's debts. When Mr. Grandet finds out, Balzac writes:
"You have not got your gold!" cried Grandet, starting up erect, like a horse that hears a cannon fired beside him.
There were others, but these are enough to get the idea. The tags are clever and reflect the emotions of the characters. They are very visual and contain the element Balzac is trying to convey: in the first one, Eugenie's new-found love dying just after it blooms; the second suggests the trepidation and fear of what will happen; and the last describes the shock Mr. Grandet feels.
This use of tags was very revealing to me, showing me a more powerful way of using tags than just describing everyday things. Perhaps this will be useful to you.
Do you already use tags this way? Do you think it would strengthen you writing if you used them in this fashion?
Wednesday, February 15, 2012
Write Like the Masters, by William Cane (2)
After reading Write Like the Masters, by William Cane, I selected the writers whom I felt most related to my own way of writing: Honore de Balzac, Charles Dickens, Edith Wharton, William Somerset Maugham, Edgar Rice Burroughs, Margarate Mitchell, Ian Fleming, and Philip K. Dick. Cane nicely explains each writer's major stylistic elements, his or her specialness. There were many other authors he discusses, so there is a lot that I did not care for for one reason or another, though someday they might appeal to me.
As an aid to seeing the big picture, I created a mind map of my favorite authors' techniques.
I can also summarize in a paragraph, especially without mentioning the particular author the technique came from, what I believe the mind map says:
As writers of fiction, we should strive for strong characters (especially conflicting characters, perhaps based on architypes) who are faced with life-defining, catastrophic events in which strong emotions (positive and negative) are highlighted (tagged) through the conflict, making the reader laugh, cry, and wait for resolution to these conflicts, all of which contain some elements of mystery, surprising the reader, and in which the character changes through an epiphany (ah-ha moment) that is foreshadowed in the fast/slow, rising/falling pace of the action, using sumptuous or strong details of description with a big background (Civil War, WW II, the Great Depression, etc.) and a strong element of romance (with obstacles to that romance) that flows in a pattern of the characters preparing for romance, participating in banter (romantic play) that is followed by the first kiss, preferrably told through the third person limited point of view of the protagonist.
Did I get it all in? Obviously, this is not a blueprint for writing. It is an aid to writing. I doubt that I or anyone else would have all these elements in the same novel, though I'm sure it's possible. But when you're thinking about and writing your story, these are elements that may enter into the story, that may increase your ideas and strengthen your story.
As an aid to seeing the big picture, I created a mind map of my favorite authors' techniques.
I can also summarize in a paragraph, especially without mentioning the particular author the technique came from, what I believe the mind map says:
As writers of fiction, we should strive for strong characters (especially conflicting characters, perhaps based on architypes) who are faced with life-defining, catastrophic events in which strong emotions (positive and negative) are highlighted (tagged) through the conflict, making the reader laugh, cry, and wait for resolution to these conflicts, all of which contain some elements of mystery, surprising the reader, and in which the character changes through an epiphany (ah-ha moment) that is foreshadowed in the fast/slow, rising/falling pace of the action, using sumptuous or strong details of description with a big background (Civil War, WW II, the Great Depression, etc.) and a strong element of romance (with obstacles to that romance) that flows in a pattern of the characters preparing for romance, participating in banter (romantic play) that is followed by the first kiss, preferrably told through the third person limited point of view of the protagonist.
Did I get it all in? Obviously, this is not a blueprint for writing. It is an aid to writing. I doubt that I or anyone else would have all these elements in the same novel, though I'm sure it's possible. But when you're thinking about and writing your story, these are elements that may enter into the story, that may increase your ideas and strengthen your story.
Friday, February 3, 2012
Word Count: Six Months Later
Yesterday I finished the revision of my 117,000 word novel Only The Lonely based on Tanya Reimer's comments on reading the entire book.
I've trimmed the book down to about 81,000 words by eliminating some of the subplots. I consider my work on the book about 95% complete. I rewrote some chapters, added a few new ones, and combined some chapters. The 5% of the work I have left to do is polishing the revisions, possibly adding one small element, and making sure the book flows properly. Hopefully, I can get that done this month. Then it's on to self-publishing the book.
I need to come up with a book cover. The one I have works, but I may look into doing something different. I'm undecided.
The subplots I eliminated are not lost or wasted effort. They will be the basis of, or part of, one or two sequels I have planned.
I've trimmed the book down to about 81,000 words by eliminating some of the subplots. I consider my work on the book about 95% complete. I rewrote some chapters, added a few new ones, and combined some chapters. The 5% of the work I have left to do is polishing the revisions, possibly adding one small element, and making sure the book flows properly. Hopefully, I can get that done this month. Then it's on to self-publishing the book.
I need to come up with a book cover. The one I have works, but I may look into doing something different. I'm undecided.
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